Dear Reader,
My essay is
about my gaming obsession when I was younger. The purpose of my essay is to
show you how it changed my development and taught me new things. I want you to
be interested in what I’m writing and feel like you’re reading something that
isn’t boring and impersonal.
I decided
to choose my topic about gaming because it was the only piece of technology
that I could think of that really affected me personally. To plan for my essay
I wrote down how gaming affected me in good and bad ways and just elaborated on
it. The only decision I really had to make was how my essay was organized. At
first I was mixing how gaming affected me negatively and positively in the same
paragraph. I then figured out that my essay would flow much better if I
separated the two completely so you can really see the difference between my
two viewpoints.
I think
having my peers review my paper helped me tremendously. At first I thought I wouldn’t
like this process at all. I don’t really like when people read my papers
because I’m not confident in my writing skills. The first person to review my
paper was one of my roommates so I felt that it could be a little bias and the
feedback I got maybe could have been better from a stranger. The second time a
girl I didn’t know at all read my paper. To my surprise she said she really
liked my paper and gave me a lot of good feedback. Overall having my paper
reviewed strengthened my paper and also gave me more confidence as a writer.
Overall I think
my paper gives you a more personal feel and you can really see how technology
changed the way I grew up. My essay is easy to get through and has personal
details that really bring my point across. Hopefully you feel the same.
Thanks,
Alex Graddon
Word Count : 330
